I really love your style: the voice is clever, funny, with amazing descriptions. I’m with the story until page 13. I don’t buy that Darlene and the Alcoholic are blind to Megan’s parents. The abuse ought to be more subtle, something that only the narrator can see. Then she’s really choosing. I’d like to see this story again if you think my comments make good sense to you. Otherwise, I’d like to see something else.